Great Forgery

[Nene]

After Apollomon returned to normal and Yuu fled back to Pandemonium, Xros Heart United Army amd Apollomon decided to carry out their plan of stopping D5 and getting Yuu back.

Taiki, Nene and Kiriha allowed Apollomon to grab them with his arms. He intentionally kept their right arms free so that they would be able to use their Xros Loaders.

Then, the four allies entered Bagramon's chamber. Yuu was next to him.

Apollomon walked up to Bagramon and bowed, releasing Taiki, Kiriha and Nene. The three instantly xrossed their Digimon into X7.

"What?" asked Bagramon in shock.

"Have you heard of authority exchange?" asked Kiriha

"Who do you want to replace me with?"

"One of your own and yet not one of your own." Taiki replied cryptically.

"Now that one gets a turn." said Apollomon stepping forward towards Bagramon.

Apollomon raised his Darkness Loader, digixrossing himself with Shoutmon X7. This way, Shoutmon X7 was even stronger.

"Solar strike" declared Shoutmon X7 Apollo mode, hurling a massive solar ball at Bagramon, who was instantly evaporated. Shoutmon X7 Apollo mode grabbed Yuu and carrying him out of danger.

Shoutmon X7 Apollo mode then reverted back to Shoutmon X7 and Apollomon. The latter put his hand over Yuu. "Impurity, disappear." whispered Apollomon. A dark cloud left Yuu's body.

"You..."

"Of course he did. He's Xros Heart United Army now." said Ballistamon

"The despair that ruined their smiles, I'll tie it to my soul and smash it down!" Taiki, Apollomon and Shoutmon sang together, looking at Nene.

Nene hugged Yuu gently.

"Thank you, everyone, she whispered.

[Talmon]

I like it overall but I have a few critisicms this time, your fics are usually about rescuing Yuu, although they are different, you should try a few different ideas too, to show you know good variety. There isn't any descriptive language, the only reason I can imagine it is because I know what you are talking about, if it was more descriptive it would be proffesional. Here are my positive comments; The speaking was used well to narrate the story without a narrative, it showed a good stretch of vocabulary, creativity, it flowed nicely, it felt like it was as long as it needed to be and I like the title, it adds more scenery.

[Magnamon]

well Kira she goes through phases(i.e. Hikari and Gatomon, Yoshi/Keenan, Nene/Taiki, Yuu) so I'm not suprised it's ANOTHER Yuu thing

[Talmon]

I'm not picking on it, it would just be nice to show she is fully capable of variety in the next fic

[Nene]

Well, I want what my namesake wants. And she wants Yuu back.

[Talmon]

But if it's anything like the classic narutovsasuke thing, it will forever be about rescuing him until the end, when a decision will be made. What about one about rescuing mimi's hat, because patamon has it stolen, that could be interesting and lengthy.

[Nene]

Well, what about saving Alphamon/Dorumon?

[Talmon]

Yeah, that could work, as long as it shows you don't have a one track mind

[Magnamon]

She has a one track mind

[Nene]

No, I don't!

[Magnamon]

You do the same thing write for or five of the same concepts then move on

[Nene]

Alphamon.

[Magnamon]

That's for a contest