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Aug 28, 2011 13:14:55 GMT -5
Post by Nene on Aug 28, 2011 13:14:55 GMT -5
Everything was in place.
Olegmon stood at Baguramon's right side, and Apollomon at his left. Xros Heart United Army members were kneeling in front of them. "Now I'll eliminate you, Xros Heart trash!" snarled Baguramon.
Taiki smirked in defiance.
"It's not Xros Heart. It's Xros Heart United Army." said Taiki.
He moved aside, letting Yuu, Kiriha and Nene to step forward. Taiki had deliberately hidden the fact that there were two more allies.
(Flashback)
"So, you agree to aid us in our struggle against Baguramon?" Taiki asked Olegmon and Apollomon.
"I know I am. After all, I'm a good Digimon." Apollomon agreed
"I agree too." added Olegmon, giving thumbs up to Taiki. Taiki returned them.
"Go now. When we arrive, you two must be by Baguramon's side. Then we'll attack him together.
(End flashback)
"Shoutmon X7!" shouted Taiki, Kiriha and Nene.
"Tsuwamon!" shouted Yuu.
Taiki nodded to Olegmon and Apollomon
"Seven Victorize Maximum!"
"Burning Boogie!
"Dual Tomahawk Boomerang!" Olegmon declared
"Fire Tornado!" shouted Apollomon
All four attacks were aimed at Baguramon.
There was and explosion. Taiki pushed Kiriha, Yuu and Nene onto ground.
The plan was deliberate and it caught Baguramon by suprise. But Taiki couldn't help but wonder whether the suprise element was enough to bring Baguramon down for good.
tbc
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Aug 28, 2011 13:36:35 GMT -5
Post by Talmon on Aug 28, 2011 13:36:35 GMT -5
It was quite good actually, definetely one of your best. It would require more detail and description to get to the next level and I think you meant obliterate Baguramon rather than deliberate but both work.
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Aug 28, 2011 13:42:47 GMT -5
Post by Nene on Aug 28, 2011 13:42:47 GMT -5
I\m not a descriptive person. Dialogue is my comfort zone.
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Aug 28, 2011 13:48:59 GMT -5
Post by Talmon on Aug 28, 2011 13:48:59 GMT -5
I know but I think it would be good if you try this for either a fic or a story: Just describe some scenary, have no dialogue, thought and characters if you want but just spend around 1000 words solely on description, post it here and let us see and when you recieve help and positive feedback you will feel better about describing.
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Aug 28, 2011 13:55:14 GMT -5
Post by Nene on Aug 28, 2011 13:55:14 GMT -5
I guess that description I gave wasn't enough...
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Aug 28, 2011 14:04:17 GMT -5
Post by Talmon on Aug 28, 2011 14:04:17 GMT -5
It was sufficient but you wanna push boundaries Nene, honestly I used to and still do hate description but because I have been pushed by certain people doing things like what I described I feel confident doing it.
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