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Post by Magnamon on Oct 1, 2011 15:46:17 GMT -5
if it was only one chappy then I'm screwed  |
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Post by Orlando on Oct 2, 2011 12:52:35 GMT -5
Yeah I think 2k words is a good minimum. We'll just stick to that until further notice. This fic is bringing back some of my old yugioh memories from my childhood. I kinda wish I remembered the whole storyline accurately, but I remember enough to understand the fic, so no worries  . I like the perspective of the story, being told from Tea's POV has a nice effect on how the story unfolds. The only negative thing I found about it was that the part where Tea confesses her love for Yugi seems kind of unrealistic and a tad akward. She would use more expressive language and tone if she was really truly deeply in love with him. Try and use more deep descriptive language to provoke more emotion in situations such as this. |
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Post by Nene on Oct 4, 2011 5:09:11 GMT -5
Could you set the date for october 15th, please?
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Post by Talmon on Oct 4, 2011 13:13:40 GMT -5
I think that's the date anyway.
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Post by Orlando on Oct 4, 2011 17:16:26 GMT -5
Yep Tally speaks the truth.
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Post by Magnamon on Oct 4, 2011 17:32:52 GMT -5
nice
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Awesome Sig by Tal
. I like the perspective of the story, being told from Tea's POV has a nice effect on how the story unfolds. The only negative thing I found about it was that the part where Tea confesses her love for Yugi seems kind of unrealistic and a tad akward. She would use more expressive language and tone if she was really truly deeply in love with him. Try and use more deep descriptive language to provoke more emotion in situations such as this.
